How not to get a job.

Because of my work with a network of churches, I often get requests from people looking for church work. I am often amazed at the poor grammar in many of these requests, and in resumes that I receive. I got this one today. I have removed the person’s name, the name of the church, and the name of the town. It is not my desire to embarrass this young man; but rather to make a point. If you are trying to impress someone to help you look for a job where communication is one of the most important skills, you may want to have someone look over your request before sending it.

ACTUAL EMAIL:

Hey my name is _________ and I am the pastor son at ________ baptist church in ____________ NC and I am licence in the ministry and I am also have my associate degree in bibical studies and bachelor degree in Bible studies and I have been preaching at different churches for almost 3 years and I was was wondering are there any churches in this assocation looking for a supply pastor or intermin or full time pastor.

I have a few suggested improvements. Some of these  are grammatical, other are stylistic:

  1. Don’t start a correspondence with someone you don’t know with “Hey”.
  2. Pastor’s son (possessive).
  3. Baptist (capitalized).
  4. __________, NC. (add comma after city name and period after “NC“).
  5. I am licensed (drop “and”, begin new sentence, spell “license” correctly and put it in the past tense).
  6. to the Ministry (replace “in” with “to”).
  7. I also have (drop “and”, begin new sentence, drop “am”).
  8. Associate’s Degree (capitalize and add possessive).
  9. Biblical Studies (capitalize and correct spelling).
  10. Bachelor’s Degree (capitalize and add possessive).
  11. Bible Studies (capitalize “studies” for consistency’s sake; was this the actual degree program?).
  12. I have been (drop “and”, start a new sentence).
  13. and I was (drop extra “was”).
  14. wondering if there are any church (reword).
  15. association (spell correctly).
  16. supply pastor, interim pastor, or full-time pastor. (reword, add comma, spell interim correctly, hyphenate full-time).

This may sound harsh, but I wouldn’t recommend him to a church based on this email. It also makes me wonder where he got his two degrees!

 

 


 

 

Second Edition

From the day I first received the hard copied of my book I began finding typo’s and small errors. Many of these were things that only I would notice, but it bothered me. I also came across passages that that could be worded better. This is probably an inevitable part of self-publishing. So, when I began running low on printed copies I decided to do a second edition. I went back through the book with a “fine toothed comb” looking for changes that needed to be made.

I truly believe the second edition is a much better product. I am almost afraid to read through it though, since I will always find things that could be worded better. With the workbook and the new edition, I truly believe these are excellent tools for churches considering their future. I have walked through the book and workbook with two cohorts of pastors, and with a church. In each case, we had great dialogue, and they began making concrete changes in their churches. This is what the book is all about.

I am currently looking to offer another cohort this fall, and I am looking for another church to walk through the process with. The book (and workbook) have eight chapters. We cover a chapter a week, using questions and discussions from the workbook in an interactive format.

I have also had the opportunity to present material from the book is several local church networks, and in many individual churches through one-day workshops.

I am glad to see that not only have people bought the book and workbook, but that they are using these tools to help shape the future of their churches. Please let me know if you would like me to come to your church for an evening, or to present the material over several weeks.